Question

Beneath the river:

Resting on the banks of the rill, the current never keeps still.

Watching a maple leaf snag on a jagged reef.

Blowing gently the breeze ripples the nipples of the crescent waves.

Life's a stir a wee smelt flickers away from that big mouth muzzle.

Slither along the sandy bottom lamprey lunching on the lifes be gone.

Blurred beneath the river's way monstrosity lay from the past that no man has ever seen.

Beast so mean they would haunt your dreams.

Truth be told their remains on display, any docent can lead you to where they stay.

azzow2 9

Answer 1

That could have contrasting meanings...one foreboding the other a song of nature!

Answer 2

I like the way the opening line flows into the story and carries the reader along.


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