First lines: Think about how the gender perspective changes your initial thought of the story to follow.
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So, she says, "I love you. . . . Just saying." How could she not?
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So, he says, "I love you. . . . Just saying." How could he not?
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Feel free to reply to any comment by clicking the "Reply" button.I would interpret the first one as being from the point of view of a man who was perhaps a little too much into himself; and the second as the POV of a woman who is in a relationship with said man, where the man has already committed to her. It sets it up for asking "is a betrayal going to happen?" or "she is beginning to doubt him"
Orbit
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Dec 11, 2018
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Suppose you back up a few paces and try that again with a bit more clarity?
evidentialist
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Dec 4, 2018
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I heard "I love you....Just sayin." in an episode of an aussi tv show i'm watching.
He didn't say, "How could she not?" That's what i thought his thought might be given how he has been portrayed, as an arrogant ass.
I often test switching gender perspectives when working on stories. And as with my example, i most often find the woman as first person can be more exploratory, inciteful, and humorous.
When i can't get to work on an existing project, i grab a statement from a post and play with it as a first line.
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