Anyone want to read a flash fiction piece called The Cauldron and give feedback?
I'm not sure why the title will not publish on the page.
Below is a link to a private page on my website.
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Feel free to reply to any comment by clicking the "Reply" button.I like your story a lot. The writing is tight, and the story revealing. I'm unsure the last line is necessary, as that point seems to be implicit to the story already; I think there's greater punch ending with her running home, no further commentary needed. Regardless, I was drawn in and found it
to be a captivating read. It makes me want to know more about the cauldron, the grandmother, the stirring of souls, and so on. If you ever spin this into a longer work, I'll definitely want to read it.
resserts
Level 8
Oct 12, 2019
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Thank you. I thought the last line was extraneous, but that was my first thought when i saw the cll for flash fiction. I think i will take that out. Thank you. Your comments were helpful.
@garbonza , Thanks for your feedback. The rules for submission on this one is less than a thousand words. i think it should be longer as well.
Lillyfield41
Level 7
Oct 11, 2019
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OK, I know what a dilemma you're facing. Our monthly writers' group limits us to 500 words that can be read out (taking turns) to the rest of the 15 members at the monthly meeting. The only solution to this dubious time-saving device is do what you've done, but only up to 500 words, and then I privately fill it out to my own satisfaction. My latest one of these is just nudging 5,000 words.
This morning another short story competition (sponsored by a local insurance company) was emailed to me. Apart from the 1,500-word limit the catch is it must start "It was 3am...", or suffer instant disqualification. Of course the only way around this is to continue with something like: "At least, that's what the clock said. But I hadn't wound it in ten years, so the actual time could have been any place on the clock face." Don't imagine the so-called organisers would go for this.
@Garbonza -- I wouldn't bet on it, but they might go for it, providing the rest of the story held up. It is a rather clever way of dealing with the restriction on the beginning line. Good on ya.
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