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Here's a little poem I wrote. I'd love to hear any thoughts or critiques!

~The Bridge:

To hunger for human interaction;
to yearn for personal attraction.
I feel your presence across the burning bridges,
The flames are ablaze with an unrequited love.

To find a way to cross this bridge together;
because sweetheart we can't do this alone.
Douse the flames in my heart,
sweetie you're a work of art.

We can put out this fire preventing our path together,
the bridge will maintain hold and we'll get closer.
Walk with me on the path of the downtrodden;
this burning bridge can't keep us apart any longer.

I'll look in your sweet eyes, and we'll find that we're closer than we ever have been before. I'll hold your hands and gaze into those galaxies in your eyes, baby, I'm right here.
As the tension on the bridge started to wane,
we clutched each other in each other's arms.

"How will we stay together when the bridge falls into the abyss?" She said.

"We'll close our eyes forever, and be together through the end. Every new beginning comes from some other beginning's end. Restart the song and travel on and we'll be there through and through."

They held each other for the last time and the first time,
they fell into the abyss with the bridge they had so carefully crossed.

Then he woke up by her side, and kissed her gently on the cheek, never before realizing how lucky he truly was.~

Quantum 4 Dec 30
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Thanks everyone! And yes, to be clear, I think I am falling in love.... it's so funny. I joined OkC recently after a recent post and was just honest and concise in my profile. I have never had so much success in a dating site in the past. I've been talking to someone quite a bit actually and we've really been getting along really well! Hoping for the best! 🙂

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I love it.

Thank you, sir 🙂

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Perhaps we might like to consider setting up a Poets Group or Poets Corner here on Agnostics.com

How can we make this happen? I'd love to contribute more!

@Quantum I believe there are a couple poets groups.

@Wildflower Are there? I've looked at the Categories list and can't find one on it.

@Triphid @Quantum There are 2 groups; Poets' Corner and Wordsmith. Try browsing groups

@Wildflower Thank you, I've found the 'Poet's Corner' and posted a piece yesterday, now I need to figure out how to make this idiotic computer allow me to post things in actual verse style instead of as a long passage of words. Not really up to scratch on my computer knowledge and the computer usage/languages stuff, grew up in the age of typewriters, pen and paper, slide-rules, etc.

I can't seem to find the Poet's Corner unfortunately. I tried browsing groups but I don't see a search function. hmm

@Quantum Just go to the Browse icon on top of the site page, left mouse press, the list will come up, left mouse on groups and the list starts to unroll, at the top there's a space for you to type in Poet's Corner, do that then key on the search icon and voila.....

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I like this very much. I could visualize the story.

Thank you! I have been working on making my poems more visually stimulating so that's awesome!! 🙂

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Not bad ??

🙂 thank you

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